Is my story good so far please help?

I have a horrible life. I have no one to be there for me when I need it. My mother was over powered by drugs and alcohol so she left me alone when I was a baby. Now she visits sometimes but those sometime visits are always ending up a 1 of torcher and separateness for me. She tells me she hates me all the time; she tells me how imperfect I am and she tells me that shes going to have a new baby and that it's going to be a perfect child. She tells me that she'll have a better more happier life. My father, he hates on everything I do. I can never live up to his expectations. He expects me to be straight A student, he thinks I'm going to follow though with his impossible ways of life. I have to be perfect for him. He hates me and he tells me... no wait... he yells it at me. He makes sure I'm unhappy with the way I'm treated. Though he does things for me sometimes, it will never make up for any of the hell that he's been putting my through for the last 16 years of my life. I don't have any one else. I wouldn't say family even exists in the life I live. But 2 lucky years in to that horrible life when I was 14 I had a baby. He was my everything. He didn't hate me. He never told me I wasn't good enough. He's always there for me when I need him. He's the only reason I'm even alive today. Without him I don't know what or where I would be. He shows me I have something to live for, that something is he himself. He taught me no matter how hard life hits to never say never. To never give up. To be the best that I could be whatever it takes. That eventually one day we can be a happy family just the two of us. But one day at school when I was waiting to come home to see my precious baby, he was gone. So was my father. I was alone. Standing in the empty house thinking where is he? To my surprise a week later my father comes back. "I'v taken him to Texas" He says as if nothing is wrong. That's when I knew I could no longer live. I found out he was living with my aunt Stephani because 'I was not able to give him the love and care he needs' Then I ran to my room. I need my baby to live. Without him It's like a nerd with out braces, shoes with out laces, a sentence without spaces. Copyright 漏 2011 Salynn Moore



Does anybody have any suggestible ideas on how I could make it better? By the way this is only my prologue. My story is about Casey a 16 year old girl who has a horrible life until she has a son Devan but later in life when Devan turns 2 he gets taken away and sent to Texas to live with Casey's Aunt Stephani. Later in Summer when school ends Casey sets out to go to Texas to get her baby back, on her way she meets a Jason a 17 year old boy and he agrees to help her get her baby. The trip is going to complicated. At the end they get the baby and Casey and Jason get married then 4 years later Devan will be 6 and they will have a baby girl together her name will be BrelleIs my story good so far please help?
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